the bid dream

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4 Responses to the bid dream

  1. rossa says:

    How did you really get into Varjaks shoes? I really love your use of emotive language because it makes the writing extremely effective. I recommend that you use more similies.

  2. lewim says:

    Well done Sude! You made me feel really excited when you said “the trees clapped in the wind!” Maybe next time you can look through your work and make sure your work makes sense 🙂

  3. warrj says:

    WOW! that is a lot of writing :). I like the font of your name, but maybe you can put some more pictures in:) 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 :).

  4. alisl says:

    Sude I love your work, its enjoyble to read. I love your punctuation its in place and also i love your verbs like ‘brushing’.
    I recommend that you should add more spech next time.

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