I love your use of similies because they stand out, Like ‘Twinkling like diamonds’. How did you use so many fronted adverbials?! Maybe next time you could check your spelling.
Good job Irsa! The fronted adverbials were really good, such as ‘afterwards’. I think you forgot about one of yours full-stop in your sentences maybe look bake and check. Your adjectives where good like ‘sparkling’.
It felt like I was there! Your fronted adverbials the best!
But, I would recommend for you to use less similes but I love them.
I love your use of similies because they stand out, Like ‘Twinkling like diamonds’. How did you use so many fronted adverbials?! Maybe next time you could check your spelling.
it is really good:)
Good job Irsa! The fronted adverbials were really good, such as ‘afterwards’. I think you forgot about one of yours full-stop in your sentences maybe look bake and check. Your adjectives where good like ‘sparkling’.
I really like you work but you need verbs.