Leila, this is REALLY good,beautiful adjectives !!!!!Also,magnificent fronted adverbials.The trouble with this that there is NO trouble with it !!!!!!!!!:)
I LOVE YOUR STORY because you have used lots of adjectives, like you used ‘vast’! But next time use different piece of punctuation!
I also love your idea of the volcano!
Your writing is wonderful! I loved it when you said “It sounded like a vast volcano erupting in a faraway land.” I also loved your use of short sentences such as” Varjak dreamed” .
Leila, this is REALLY good,beautiful adjectives !!!!!Also,magnificent fronted adverbials.The trouble with this that there is NO trouble with it !!!!!!!!!:)
I LOVE YOUR STORY because you have used lots of adjectives, like you used ‘vast’! But next time use different piece of punctuation!
I also love your idea of the volcano!
Your writing is wonderful! I loved it when you said “It sounded like a vast volcano erupting in a faraway land.” I also loved your use of short sentences such as” Varjak dreamed” .