great story i loved the part when you described the lordships bed. i would add a exclamation mark at the end!
that was a great part of your writing keep up the cool work but maybe try and make it more formal next time, where did you get this idea from?
well done i did not think about doing it in that perspective starting with Emily and Lizzie maybe next time try more complex and flowing sentences. IF not WELL DONE 🙂
thanks 🙂 i will take that in my stride
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great story i loved the part when you described the lordships bed. i would add a exclamation mark at the end!
that was a great part of your writing keep up the cool work but maybe try and make it more formal next time, where did you get this idea from?
well done i did not think about doing it in that perspective starting with Emily and Lizzie maybe next time try more complex and flowing sentences. IF not
WELL DONE
🙂
thanks 🙂 i will take that in my stride