Very good it has great suspense and I already want to read the rest of the story. I don’t think there’s anything you need to improve on apart from that you need to make it longer. My question is who’s body is lays lifelessly on top of the pile I cant wait to find out
nice work Sam this sentence makes me interested to read the rest of your story ! very detailed . there is nothing wrong with this . my only question is a pile of what ?
Very good it has great suspense and I already want to read the rest of the story. I don’t think there’s anything you need to improve on apart from that you need to make it longer. My question is who’s body is lays lifelessly on top of the pile I cant wait to find out
This work is amazing. So powerful. Is this the start of the story? Maybe you could post some more of the story.
Well done!
nice work Sam this sentence makes me interested to read the rest of your story ! very detailed . there is nothing wrong with this . my only question is a pile of what ?
Thanks , there is more of the story but I didn’t want to post that part. Sorry but I won’t be reveling who’s body that is.
Its not the start of the story its the build up and its a pile of dead bodies.