This was really enjoyable Edie,I loved the way you used your adjectives. Also, you use a handful of fronted adverbials. But bye the way you were spelling for was SO close but you spell fire like fire. But really good 🙂
Edie I love your thrilling story about Varjack Paw it is soo good!!! I especially liked the simile that said ”When he looked up he saw the glittering stars like golden fire balls dancing in the midnight sky”! I just wanted to point out some spelling mistakes like, fire and bristling.
I love how it felt like you where in his shoes. The adjectives you used are amazing. Probably, you could add in less fronted adverbials.
I loved that story! The part I loved the most was when you didn’t say ‘the’ all the time. Personally,I think you should do a bit more writing.
This was really enjoyable Edie,I loved the way you used your adjectives. Also, you use a handful of fronted adverbials. But bye the way you were spelling for was SO close but you spell fire like fire. But really good 🙂
Edie I love your thrilling story about Varjack Paw it is soo good!!! I especially liked the simile that said ”When he looked up he saw the glittering stars like golden fire balls dancing in the midnight sky”! I just wanted to point out some spelling mistakes like, fire and bristling.
This is an outstanding piece of work, Edie! I really like when you typed the stars were like golden fire balls. You just spelt fire wrong!
I loved it 🙂
you had a nice youse adjectives